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POEM: Another Way Out

Postby seekinghga » Fri Apr 27, 2018 10:15 am

Another Way Out
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She got sad today. She cried so very hard
That all her tears were washed away,
So then she smiled and thought of happy things to say
The way that happy people seem to do.
What’s the cost of love?
For her it’s altruism, often something blue,
A blank check to anguish signed indifferent of
The heart that masks the hurt she can’t discard.

I saw you once before,
Who you are now, I’m not so sure,
If you must then you’ll just kick me on the floor,
But your foot will pass right through
Here in my mind, ain’t nothing new,
I’ll close my eyes, assure myself I still love you;
These cruel things you do to me,
They break me down but set me free
‘Cause in the pain I count each second to eternity...
Then the end will mend.
Take it all away.
Take us to some happy kingdom together, come what may,
Hand in hand like we used to do.
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
- LXV 5:59
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Re: POEM: Another Way Out

Postby Takamba » Fri Apr 27, 2018 11:45 am

First you go, "OH!"
Then you find you.
Then you have tea.

Get out!
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Re: POEM: Another Way Out

Postby seekinghga » Fri Apr 27, 2018 12:24 pm

Takamba wrote:First you go, "OH!"
Then you find you.
Then you have tea.

Get out!

I'm not worthy of such prime adulation as one of my betters deigning to commentate on something that I've written! Let's analyze it, shall we? :D

First you go, "OH!"

Such brilliant commentary. It tells us a lot about the psyche of such an individual. Not so much due to the piece that they are critiquing, but because of their approach. What they're attacking. Marvel at the use of superlative adjectives! Crowley would be proud!

Then you find you.

Well, yes. With this we discover a dark dimension to the inspector's vocabulary. It's almost as if they have some carnivorous caricature of cynicism to disclose with but the fleeting fragment of intellectual maturity with which to disclose it. You think? Almost.

Then you have tea.

We've all seen this a dozen times before... What have I told you, Takamba? What have I always told you? Haven't I always told you a thousand times over to NEVER CUT AGAINST THE GRAIN OF THE WOOD? Didn't I!? Tsk tsk.

Get out!

It's Friday. What else would I be doing? Thanks for asking. :)
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
- LXV 5:59
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Re: POEM: Another Way Out

Postby Angel of Death » Sat Apr 28, 2018 5:41 am

Nailed it :angel:
Love is the Law.
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Re: POEM: Another Way Out

Postby seekinghga » Tue May 22, 2018 4:27 pm

Angel of Death wrote:Nailed it :angel:

Is that good? :(
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
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Re: POEM: Another Way Out

Postby Angel of Death » Wed May 23, 2018 12:36 pm

good and bad are :angel: perceptions.

I liked it.
if that means it was good or not Im not so sure
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Re: POEM: Another Way Out

Postby Takamba » Wed May 23, 2018 2:43 pm

seekinghga wrote:
Angel of Death wrote:Nailed it :angel:

Is that good? :(


Christ!
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Re: POEM: Another Way Out

Postby Angel of Death » Wed May 23, 2018 4:14 pm

You are always right on Time
You puny friend of mine
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Re: POEM: Another Way Out

Postby seekinghga » Fri Jun 01, 2018 4:10 pm

Angel of Death wrote:good and bad are :angel: perceptions.

I liked it.
if that means it was good or not Im not so sure

Good or bad are just perceptions, or, flavors of perception. Pfft. I'm glad you liked it. Pardon my maudlin queries. :)

Takamba wrote:Christ!

"With my Hawk’s head I peck at the eyes of Jesus as he hangs upon the cross."

Angel of Death wrote:You are always right on Time
You puny friend of mine

So just go and take the dime
And smoke it up,
Consecrate the shrine.
(If I may be permitted to continue thy rhyme. ;))
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
- LXV 5:59
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